My first “Beta Reader” report came back tonight. This is good. I may just have enough time to address the issues raised (which were already in the back of my mind, anyway) before the Tuesday deadline for the Manuscript Contest.
It sucks a little bit that I was aware of some of the issues already. It means I had chosen to put them in the “Too Hard” basket. But then again, I like a challenge. Can I deal with htem without fundamentally changing the story? I think I can. It’s amazing how much I have had to leave out of this just over 100,000 word story (currently at 103,908), and I’m about to take out a little more (because it is simply an issue I didn’t have the space for my characters to deal with in this story). I was worried I wouldn’t have material for a trilogy. I think I do now that I have to keep relegating all this stuff to Book 2. It is stuff that readers will want to know – it’s good back story! But it was awkward to bring up in this Book.
Oh, one comment from my reader was that the title (“Weapons of War”) wasn’t all that “interesting” … hmmm. Anyone got any ideas?
That could still be the title of the Trilogy, of course. I haven’t finalized that, yet.
So themes to base titles on …
* I have a girl who can heal (she is a Syaenuk – the most superior form of the Aenuk race).
* I have a man who is super fast and strong (he is a Syakaran – the most superior form of the Karan (pl. Kara) race)
* I have two warring nations (though no wars are currently going on in this first book) who use the two races for their own purposes: Quaver uses the Kara as soldiers, Turhmos uses the Aenuks as soldiers and medics.
* Now, healing’s a cool thing, right? But not so much if you drain the life out of any living thing you’re touching when either you heal yourself or someone else. That’s the side effect of being and Aenuk.
* There is a special kind of knife that delivers wounds to Aenuks that they can’t heal from. Syakara tend to carry them (they’re dangerous to use if you can’t get out of the way of a flailing Aenuk if you fail to deliver the fatal blow – so it’s best wielded by those who are super fast and super strong). Aenuks can’t heal from wounds inflicted by the knives – doesn’t mean they don’t drain stuff in an effort to do so. — So the knife, while not playing a huge role in the story is a central part of it, so could feature in the title.
* Aenuks can’t heal Kara (Kara are too powerful – it’s too risky, so it’s a natural self-preservation mechanism).
* There is a special tree that can heal Aenuks without being damaged itself (an Ajnai tree). This coud feature in a title … I could see that.
* The Aenuks and the Kara are descended from the Immortals (a race that was strong, fast, could heal and generally lived a long time – not literally immortal, though, just by comparison). There are no Immortals anymore. — something else I could see coming into a title.
Right, I’m off to fix a scene and contemplate titles …