Reviews and improvements

DebE —  August 9, 2011 — Leave a comment

I haven’t made any great progress on the overall forward thrust of my story in the last couple of days. However, I did sign up to a website called “You Write On” where you can post the opening chapters of your book (5000-7000 words of them, anyway) and you get reviewed by other writers, and eventually can earn the right to be reviewed by actual agents/editors! Yes, sir!

So, up went Chapter 1 plus most of Chapter 2. And I have received three reviews now. I have also tightened up these two chapters considerably – partly to get as much of the story up within the word count as possible and partly because of the reviews I have received. I will update those chapters shortly. Anyway, to help me carry on writing, I am going to share the positive comments here (there aren’t negative ones, as such, just suggested alterations – which I will consider making as more reviews come in).

Here goes:

“Hi Deb, great pace, good action. strong characters. i read without stopping… great storyline. cheers”

“This was an interesting read and quite well written. The short introductory paragraph of description was bright and not drawn out. I like in introduction of “swiped three purses” as a sudden revelation to draw attention to the main character… There’s not much more I can say about these chapters except one feels sure Llewella will have many adventures.
Good Luck, Deb”

“I think the story has lots of potential and you have introduced a few interesting characters and also set the scene for adventure to come…”




Deb E was born in New Zealand’s North Island, but her parents corrected that within months, moving south to Dunedin and staying there. Childhood nights were spent falling asleep to cover versions of Cliff Richard and the Shadows and other Rock ’n Roll classics played by her father’s band, and days were spent dancing to 45 LPs. Many of her first writing experiences were copying down song lyrics. She graduated to scientific reports when she studied a nematophagus fungus in the Zoology department of the University of Otago, trading all traces of popularity for usefulness… then traded both for fiction. Mum of one human & four fur-babies.

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