With great thanks to The Canary!
I sent in my brief blurb that I put together a few months ago and they ripped it to shreds and built it back up for me.
As I am, admittedly, an amateur writer and I started on my “novel” simply as a way to entertain myself, never expecting to get quite so carried away with it, I have a lot to learn of the writing craft, yet. And with the help of CanarytheFirst(and let us not forget TheOtherCanary) I am one step closer to Mastery (though I must admit that I never expect to attain it, the journey is enlightening!).
What’s fabulous is that this blurb review helps highlight not only the things in the blurb that I need to strip out or strengthen, but it encourages me to revisit what I have written so far to ensure that my plot is as strong as my revised blurb should be. I believe that the plot I have in mind is strong. But I know that there are some steps along the way that I need to develop more fully to realize it.
On that note, I wish to apologize to my two readers – who I appreciate greatly (love and kisses for your interest in my story), but I do need to go back and alter a couple of scenes – one fairly fundamentally, the other less so (more of just a little character development). One reason that I haven’t been churning out the work of late is that one of said scenes has been niggling at my mind. Not always directly, I might admit. Often, I have been bothered about how exactly to move forward in light of how things are currently set up. And I keep coming back to a sense of who Jonas is and what he has done in his past. And, yet again, I have muzzled this reckless, quick-tempered young man – I changed my original view of his reaction to the deaths of his wife and child just for the sake of a conversation scene, so that he could say “the right thing” for what I wanted to happen next… But it isn’t right. He should still have reacted extremely violently. It’s who he is. So I am going to put that back – it’s not directly written in the story, and I don’t think it ever will be, but it’s important for me to know, and drop hints at. It means that I have to re-write the conversation between Jonas and Hisham.
Another thing I don’t like is the scene with Llewella and Cassidy’s mother… I just don’t like it. I think I will take it out altogether. Anyway, you can see that I have quite a lot of further planning to do. I also need to print out what I have done and put some red pen through it. I know that some authors say to just write and then edit. But I can’t continue if my back story is fundamentally flawed. I have a plan in the back of my mind, but I must commit it to paper or computer so that can see the weaknesses in it before I write another 50K words.
Yesterday I began a spreadsheet in which I am going to detail what each character was doing/feeling at various times before and during the novel’s time-frame.
I also need to write the scenes I keep intending to have in the story – at the moment, Llewella and Jonas’ relationship just kind of springs up. I want more interaction between them earlier on – but no, not mushy stuff, that’s not where I’m going with this. Plus, the more conversations they have, the more back-story we get, especially regarding Jonas. And another thing I wish to do is to showcase their powers more. I have one scene up my sleeve for that purpose.
In the meantime, I am also working on TWO short story contest entries! Indeed! One of which is due by the end of this week, so I must away and write that, I guess… although, now I am keen to revisit WotW. Oh well. Needs must.